tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post4644972449177698309..comments2023-05-08T10:20:25.096-04:00Comments on Magician's Merger: Chapter 15: Roll Out the BarrelXenophon Hendrixhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-62673743049485957812009-12-17T21:44:54.614-05:002009-12-17T21:44:54.614-05:00Mike and Charlie decided to play? Or Rich and Cha...Mike and Charlie decided to play? Or Rich and Charlie.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-58385438852805950692008-06-11T16:24:00.000-04:002008-06-11T16:24:00.000-04:00Typo: "Ursus's influence was continuing it's mello...Typo: "Ursus's influence was continuing it's mellowing effect"<BR/><BR/>"it's" should be "its."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-38999662487263867512008-05-29T15:50:00.000-04:002008-05-29T15:50:00.000-04:00Hello, I have really enjoyed your story so far, it...Hello, I have really enjoyed your story so far, it has a refreshing innocence and hopefulness along with interesting and believable characters. thank you.<BR/><BR/>However, I am posting this because on reading this a second time I noticed a typo. --><BR/> "I shut the door so the poster-size pair picture was visible."<BR/> I presume you mean bear.<BR/><BR/>Wonderful story.Alex Predoehlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01477082057219248081noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-3020331472358474172008-04-27T21:55:00.000-04:002008-04-27T21:55:00.000-04:00I never said they were going to be having sex, alt...I never said they were going to be having sex, although it does happen at that age, sometimes.Xenophon Hendrixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-87106211565325402612008-04-27T21:48:00.000-04:002008-04-27T21:48:00.000-04:00As they say, the truth is stranger than fiction.Bu...As they say, the truth is stranger than fiction.<BR/><BR/>But, legally too, to keep protective parents and communities off your back, you might consider relegating any adventures or references the kids have to implicit ones, rather than descriptive ones. Anything published online is subject to legal action, although writing is not photography of course. Like I said, it may be accurate, but it's kind of revolting to read about.<BR/><BR/>I do admire your accuracy, however.Frostsilfrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15907838275746588224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-91384834734596827312008-04-27T21:43:00.000-04:002008-04-27T21:43:00.000-04:00Old Softy, thanks for the catch.Ryan, perhaps they...Old Softy, thanks for the catch.<BR/><BR/>Ryan, perhaps they are overreacting. We'll see.<BR/><BR/>Silverstatue, I don't know what to tell you. I trying to portray these kids as accurately as I can. I may get it wrong, but I'm trying not to idealize it at all. I'm also trying not to make any of them act older than their years, except for Arthur, who has help.<BR/><BR/>I'm mostly basing these kids on what I remember me and my friends being like. I was definitely checking out girls at that age. The girls and boys in sixth grade were definitely flirting--not all of them, but definitely some of them. In less than a year, they will be going to school dances.<BR/><BR/>They aren't actually dating in terms of one-on-one dates, but they have certainly passed the years where the opposite sex is icky, and they are again doing things with each other. Some of them do, indeed, consider each other boyfriend and girlfriend.<BR/><BR/>Remember, at that age and for the next few years, physical maturity is highly variable.<BR/><BR/>For what it is worth, I have in part based all of the primary characters in the story off people I knew or combinations of people I knew. (Mike's brass knuckles were actually a meat cleaver, but I thought that was too over the top, even though it was true.)Xenophon Hendrixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-64810391604246991782008-04-27T21:02:00.000-04:002008-04-27T21:02:00.000-04:00Good story. I just read it through. The first chap...Good story. I just read it through. The first chapter was a bit too much of an info dump with the ages of the parents and descriptions given before the new memories were explained. It was a bit jarring. After that, pretty interesting. The only thing that really bothers me is the age of the kids and the dating. Would be better, imho, if they were 14 at least. I would personally leave out all mention of dating, besides some tame hand-holding or studying together, until the kids were adult. The mention of an 11-year-old's backside? ...a little much, despite that it may be an accurate portrayal of Arthur's thoughts.Frostsilfrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15907838275746588224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-1349479872683614582008-04-27T16:59:00.000-04:002008-04-27T16:59:00.000-04:00Ursus and Arthur are really overreacting, I think....Ursus and Arthur are really overreacting, I think. Sure, it looks a tad questionable, but it's also four on one, he sent his sister to get help, and then he was the one that called for help at the end. It's pure self-defense on his part. Not to mention that some of these kids are a hell of a lot bigger than he is.Ryan Judkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05158174415649117899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1038921089824676189.post-70979213884078503572008-04-27T13:48:00.000-04:002008-04-27T13:48:00.000-04:00Action packed episode!Typo "I yanked has curly" sh...Action packed episode!<BR/>Typo "I yanked has curly" should be "his"<BR/><BR/>Old SoftyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com